tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3455515313352221740.post631965172165820306..comments2023-04-15T01:15:16.228-07:00Comments on From Coruscant to Nauarin: "Come on, Scwartz...come on, Schwartz...come on, Schwartz!": The Dark Side ... of writingTess Williamshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13617328542841721590noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3455515313352221740.post-11223897686142310262013-08-28T09:32:21.364-07:002013-08-28T09:32:21.364-07:00Heehee, thanks! Mostly, I was curious if it was po...Heehee, thanks! Mostly, I was curious if it was possible to keep the good ideas and work around them with language. I love Daala, actually - I think she's really interest. Sort of like Izard ... lots of potential to be really cool. But the language holds Daala back. <br /><br />I'm exactly the same way about "felt" - ugh!! Like I said, I'd always prefer to see how are character feels and is - don't tell me, SHOW me! I want to be absorbed into the story and have to shake myself free of it, not constantly be jolted out of it by poor language...<br /><br />I think you should give this a try, too. It's actually a really good writing exercise and if we both show we have mad skills, maybe we'll be allowed to write our own Star Wars novels someday ;)Tess Williamshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13617328542841721590noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3455515313352221740.post-28584333083593823242013-08-27T21:27:22.678-07:002013-08-27T21:27:22.678-07:00It is my BIGGEST pet peeve when an author, or aspi...It is my BIGGEST pet peeve when an author, or aspiring author, uses "felt" instead of describing what it is the character is feeling! Every single time I came across that in my writer's group, I marked it. They thought I was being ridiculous, but it is a legitimate writing error. I am not a fan of sloppy or lazy writing, and being an author is hard work. You have to consider how your characters are feeling at all moments and then find the right verbiage to describe those feelings. <br /><br />You did an amazing job converting the "felt" into a feeling we can all understand, totally changing the sentence into something I as a reader can identify with. I think you should write Star Wars novels, Es. Or at least rewrite all of the terrible ones we've read thus far... ^_~ Annie Carlhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11935420044737468543noreply@blogger.com